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Today I introduce the heroine of The Catch, Joanne McKenna Friedman, a young lawyer with a jaded past and no family to turn to. A runaway at sixteen, she learned the hard way and pays for it even now, left with a distrust of all men. She’s worked her way through law school at night, by day she works for Charlie Costigan Kahn’s construction company. After hearing rumors about Thomas Donnelly, Charlie’s boyfriend in college for a short time, she has a dislike for him. In the following eight, she’s sitting next to him at Haven, where Charlie and her family are spending the summer. Dinnertime!
excerpt in eight:
She sat, gazed around at the long table filled with happy friends and family when suddenly the enemy, Tom Donnelly, tucked in next to her. One small bite of beef tenderloin led to another and soon in her mind’s eye she pictured herself as a hungry little girl, mother saying, “ two bites is enough for the likes of you, kid.” Forcing the picture away, Joanne slowed down, chewed and ate with the same deliberation that led to all her accomplishments so far.
Aware of Tom’s glances and attempts at conversation, she ignored him instead choosing the company of little Jake and Luke Costigan, Shelley and Jimmy’s boys. The boys tossed conversation over her head like a basketball to their new best friend, Tom.
Positive they wished Tom sat next to them, Joanne offered to switch chairs but Tom seemed to enjoy her discomfort.
After dinner with briefcase in hand, Joanne strode to her car when Tom’s deep voice called, “What have I done to make you so antagonistic toward me?” offering a wrapped napkin with the tempting smell of cookies inside.
“Don’t flatter yourself; I’m cautious about uh, new people coming close so thanks for the cookies; and, and don’t ever hurt Charlie or her family, ever, or Thomas Donnelly, you’ll have to answer to me.”
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