“Sunday, Sunday, so good to me.” Or is the song “Monday, Monday?” Oh yes. The Mommas and The Poppas with their incredible harmony. Whatever the day, I’m happy to be here with you all to share our snippets of eight sentences and read creative comments to help us with our chosen work.
This week I continue with Reconstructing Charlie. She just killed her father in self defense protecting both her mom and herself. Step by step I take you through what happens next.
excerpt in eight:
Mom’s thick auburn hair came loose from her bun and she looked so pretty bending over him, a finger pressed to his neck as if she was a cop. On tiptoes, she pulled the ceiling fan chain and her sleeve rolled back. I counted black and blue marks covering her arm and knew Mom had a lot more than I did. The breeze felt good: then she wiped my fingerprints off the tire iron and replaced them with hers.
I watched Mom change from quiet refined Liz Costigan to someone I didn’t know.
She reached in his pants like a pickpocket and came up with a handful of dollars and coins. Handing me the money, Mom said, “I guess he drank the rest of his pay, sorry it’s not more but it’s all we have so let’s get you packed.”
I wondered where she was sending me and why.
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Author Charmaine Gordon 
Beaten down, she still finds the way to be methodical and protect her child – and Charlie still sounds in disbelief at what she did.
Hmm. We’ll see about Mom. Thanks, Chelle.
Wow- I love the character voice in this- great job. Your description of the bruises and what the Mom was doing made it easy to follow even thought I hadn’t read any other part.
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I like her resignation and methodical attitude to the next action they need to take. Very realistic (i would imagine!)
Nice description of Mom. I hadn’t thought about her quite like that. Are we having fun or what?
A mom will do anything to protect their child…It’s clear she’s thought about this moment many times in the past.
Good. It comes through and what happens next. . .Sarah, you are very perceptive.
Oh, that’s really nice following last week…the slow, calm, almost dreamlike feel of this. Great detail too!
Hi Eleri, love your comment. Dreamlike, slow,calm and picture dear old Dad on the floor.
Yeah that’s it, you give a dreamlike feel to this part. Charlie’s probably in a bit of daze having just done something so drastic. The scene makes me interested not just in Charlie, but her mom too.
Kids, you are wonderful. And the day has just begun.
This is a fascinating story and I’m mesmerized by the way the mother is moving in to protect her daughter. Excellent excerpt!
Mom’s clean up the mess, don’t we? Always. I have your Dancer of the Nile next to my bed ready to read, Veronica.
great way of showing us the moms support and insight on her character. loved this
More to follow. Thanks, Michelle.
Great snippet. I like how the story is evolving.
Evolve. A story peels like an onion layer by layer. Thanks Skye.
Wow! Really powerful stuff. I love the slow weave of this story. Great snippet.
Once Charlie runs for the bus, it’s a journey to another world. I appreciate your weekly comments.
I’m glad her mother is with it enough to get Charlie out of there and take the blame herself. No one would question self-defense under the circumstances. I like the otherworldly quality to the scene, with Charlie noticing how pretty her mother looks bending over a corpse. Very nicely done, Charmaine.
A new mother is released from bondage after dear old Dad’s demise. And Charlie is sent away.
Wow, what a brave woman. Very curious to see where she’s sending her daughter. Well done!
To be continued. Hang onto to your hat and thanks, Evelyn for your fine comment.
It touches me deeply to see a scarred and beaten woman being as strong as she is to protect her child from harm. Wonderful.
Hi Dana. Thanks for stopping by and sharing your emotional comment.
I suspect the mental abuse has been even worse than the physical. As for right now, it’s clear they’re both in shock.
Oh Sue ann, my perceptive friend., at the end it will all be revealed.
A mother protects her child as best she can… But I think this might make things worse, in the long run.
(Anyone else have “He Had it Coming” from Chicago playing in their minds?)
More to follow, All is not what it seems.
Haha! I just read Caitlin’s comment as I was getting ready to comment that he had it coming. 🙂 This is such a good book, and great story to launch your characters’ tales. 🙂 Good 8, Charmaine! Yeah…we’re having fun! 🙂
He’s not the only one “who had it coming” but I won’t get that far in the story. Just finished my WIP. Oh boy. What fun is this! Never cut humor is my motto.
So intense! A mother’s love though. Wow. Riveting 8!
Thanks Karen. I hope you stay riveted in what follows.
A fascinating and intriguing eight there.
Hi Stevie, thanks for stopping by with a terrific comment.
Powerful excerpt showing stoic horror and pulling me along with the need to know what’s next.