More than a year ago, Weekend Writers have given new meaning to Sundays in my life. Thanks to all commenters, talented writers, with their constructive critique week after week.
I continue this week with Grace Meredith , a nineteen year old senior at a college in NY state and her first romantic encounter with the Big Man on Campus, Scott Dwyer. They’ve just stopped for burgers and fries before going to her apartment off-campus. The book is titled She Didn’t Say No, Vanilla Heart Publishing.
excerpt in eight:
First we sat on the couch and necked which led to touching and stroking each other and then , oh so politely, he asked if I minded if he did this and that and soon we were naked on my maiden double bed with pink flowered sheets and a matching spread.
“Grace, you’re so beautiful,” Scott said and fondled my breasts as if they were treasures and tasted one nipple and then the other sucking like a baby searching for milk.
My hands grabbed his head, ran my fingers through his thick curly hair and held him close never wanting him leave, my first lover, my only love.
He said, “Do you have protection?”
“I have a diaphragm and cream but I never used it,” and it occurred to me this was a funny conversation in the heat of nakedness although we didn’t laugh.
“Oh, well, this time leave it up to me but next time practice until you get it right because I have a feeling we’re gonna need a lot of protection.”
He groaned and I heard a rip of a packet and fumbling and soon he played with the dark moist space between my thighs until I lifted my hips to heaven when slowly, he entered virgin territory where only a tampon had been. No comparison here as he continued to move in a little deeper each time to break the barrier and we were one reaching for the stars.
So this is what all the fuss is all about, I thought, and wanted more. 
http://www.amazon.com/She-Didnt-Say-Beginning-Not/dp/0615959865
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Shout out news: Thrilled to announce a 5 star review for No Time for Green Bananas from the renowned LASR Reviews.
Author Charmaine Gordon 
Excellent description. Dare I say I felt like I was right on the couch with these young people… What year (approximately) was this? The tone sounds like a few decades ago. Great 8.
1960, Chelle. So I pulled you right in, you rascal. Good job, me. Thanks, you.
Lovely, realistic description of a first time! Well written and easy to read.
Thanks, Gemma. The experienced boy and the virgin.
He’s very sweet, but I’m worried for her. First times are wrought with danger. Great snippet!
Indeed. Her mother should have warned her.
I like “virgin territory where only a tampon had been.” I’m glad he had a condom!
Thanks, Sandra. I found this scene easy to write from a distance yet memories lingered from college days away from the safety of home.
Beautifully written excerpt, as always!
Hi Veronica. Thanks for your kind words.
Such a sensual, romantic scene! May I make a suggestion: the part where ‘he said, “Do you have protection?” ‘ Should be he asked…. I’m glad he’s concerned about using condoms in this situation. Great snippet, overall.
Frank, thanks for your comment. Actually ‘said’ is the preferred word keeping a neutral tone to everything spoken.
Nice 8, Charmaine. You’ve done a great job of capturing the voice of the time while maintaining the romance and her trepidation vs. enthusiasm.
Balancing act, if there ever was one. Thanks, Nan.
Very sweet! I like that he hadn’t embarrassed her in any way. First times can be rough, emotionally as well as physically. Nicely done. 🙂
Hi Dianne. Thanks for the kind comment
You write intimate scenes well, Charmaine. I don’t find myself cringing or skimming the paragraphs to reach the end. Nothing gratuitous in your stories. Nicely done 🙂 !.
Smiley face here, Teresa. Thanks for the praise. Never gratuitous. I just don’t get the endless descriptions of who does what etc. Many authors don’t believe in subtlety.
Good on them for being responsible! Like the occasional awkwardness–it’s ‘real’ without going too far the other way, when everything is so weird you expect the characters to lose the mood.
I appreciate your comment, Caitlin.
Great description, Charmaine. It was both sweet and sexy. You got the first time right on the money. 🙂
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Hey Cindy, that’s what I was looking for.
This is a wonderful example of a sex scene that works despite leaving the details fuzzy. Wonderful job with this, beginning to end.
Marcia, your comment is music to my ears. Thanks.
Wonderful descriptions that were both tantalizing and sweet at the same time. Enjoyed the snippet.
So I got it right. Thanks. It’s not easy as we all know.
I think the previous comments have said it all.
Happy dance here. We are the best group ever. If a story needs adjusting,we’re here to help fix it. And if the author has done well , praise is given. Champagne party, gang. Come on over.
Oh my!!
That says it all. Thanks, Karen.
I am so nervous about what’s going to follow this little act…all because she didn’t say no…
Just posted tomorrow’s snippet and that’s the last one for She Didn’t Say No. I’ll move on to another story. Thanks for your comments, Millie. You’re a sweetheart,