May Day, May Day. A signal for help in the military. Often writers call May Day searching for constructive criticism as we write and that’s exactly what we receive here at WEWRIWA. 
This week I continue with She Never Said Yes. Danny and Joy are engaged and plan to be married right after he finishes pilot training and receives his Air Force wings at a formal ceremony in San Antonio, TX. Joy’s father pays for them to meet in Oklahoma City for a weekend one month prior to the ceremony. At Chicago’s bustling airport, Joy’s father says, “Be a good girl.’
Excerpt in eight:
Adjoining rooms with my sweetheart, temptation was almost more than we could bear. So we kissed, bodies pressed together straining against the blanket I’d wrapped around him to remind us to stop. In the corner of my mind were Father’s words trusting, “Be a good girl, Joy” and mother’s warning not to allow ‘privileges.’
Over and over, I stopped him with, “Wait honey, it’s the right thing to do and I’ve already picked out a virginal white lace wedding gown.”
Laughing, fighting desire, kissing, two wonderful days had passed and I just started to pack when the phone rang.
Father’s voice demanded, “Joy, come home right now, Mother is very ill.”
Panic set in, my hands trembled remembering all the times Mother needed to rest and how she stumbled so often.
We kissed good bye and I left my sweetheart shaking his head, looking bewildered as I hurried to American Airlines where I boarded the plane to Chicago to cry on the long flight home.
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Author Charmaine Gordon 
Oh no, this doesn’t sound good… Will she ever see him again? Will she have to devote her time to taking care of her parents and give up on her own life? Good description, grabs me right in and gets me worried.
Hi Chelle. There’s lots to worry about. Even I’m worried and sad for this turn of events. YIKES!
Their goodbye is sweet and poignant.
Thanks, Cara. What lies ahead is not so sweet.
Oh no, oh no, oh no. Tragedy looms, I can feel it. Their goodbye was quick. The one two people give when they expect to see each other again, but so many things could go wrong. Great snippet, Charmaine.
Sad to say, things do go way wrong for these two sweethearts.
A very ominous snippet. You just know something is going to go wrong! Great suspense!
Ominous is the word. Her father says that family comes first.
Oh no, just when everything was going so well! Lovely scene in the bedroom.
Life interferes-if you let it. Thanks for your comment, Gemma.
Hmm, poor sweet couple. I can think of several scenarios that could happen…none of them good. You’ve got me wondering where you are going to take the reader.
Tune in next week and much thanks, Millie.
Lots of tension here! And a great set up for what’s coming…what is coming?
Anne, I’m so pleased to have you stop by. What’s coming is, shhhh. Don’t tell
Aww, I hate to see their love affair end so abruptly on the wings of a tragedy. I do hope they can reunite again soon! Great work, Charmaine!
I appreciate your heartfelt comment, Evelyn.
I really these two characters. The dramatic tension of this snippet is great! I know their reunion will be powerful, whenever it happens.
Alexiss, I had to smile reading your comment ‘whenever it happens.’ So true and in the future.
Here comes the massive complication.
You have your crystal ball shined up to see the future, Sueann.
They seem so sweet and in love, but something tells me this trip home won’t be a good thing.
Dark clouds ahead for the high school sweethearts.
Of all the things I was expecting, I didn’t see this coming, so well done there! Except I like your two characters so much, I really don’t want them to suffer! Excellent excerpt and I’m totally invested in their story.
There must be conflict and here it comes-a bushel full.
Oh, dear. I agree with everyone else—trouble is coming!
Hi Sarah, talk about foreshadowing. Oh my!
This is not good timing for an illness! I love how both her parents are so vague on the proper behavior–enough that she knows what not to do, somehow, but still…
Joy pays dearly for being the dutiful daughter. Thanks, Caitlin.
awww, so much emotion packed into so few sentences! Love the sexual tension and the familial suspense. Great job with this part.
More next week, my friend, Odd how my heart breaks for two fictional characters.
Oh so sad they had to part in such a way. I do hope they will find each other again. 🙂
Thanks, Karen. The story takes a major twist here. Let’s hope, eventually, for an HEA.
Oh, no! Left with a looming sense that something awful is about to happen:(
There must be conflict and here it comes. Thanks, Eleri
Oh boy…tough times are ahead. 🙂 I do enjoy reading your stories of more innocent times, Charmaine! And I’m so happy about your book to movie deal! SO very proud of you 🙂 !
Anxious to move on, I jumped ahead to this part. Now I worry you all didn’t get to see the story develop. But what’s done cannot be undone. Next week my eight will be from devastated Danny. Teresa, I’m proud of me, too. Somehow I went from homemaker to actor to writer in later life. More good fortune ahead. I feel it. Thanks for the weekly boost.