7/20/14 WEWRIWA

Oh no, July is flying by and I’m not ready. One day at a time so calm day and enjoy every moment, I tell myself.

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Thanks to Teresa Cypher’s’ comment last week, today’s eight is about the flame lit by Maverick, the pool guy. His kind attention to my heroine helps  her believe she is special again after husband Frank threw her under the bus by leaving.  The pool enclosure is heated, decorated like a tropical paradise inside and Beth swims every day and night. Maverick shows the plans to a wealthy perspective buyer and excited, stops by one night to tell her. To her annoyance, he knocks on the enclosure door.

excerpt in eight:

Opening the door enough for him to enter, she locked it again and said, “What in the world are you doing here?”
He shuffled around in his boots looking ashamed for disturbing her and then picked a towel off the rack and patted water from Beth’s arms. “ I uh, was passing by, saw the lights on in the pool house and wanted to tell you about, uh, to make sure you were okay.”
Beth noticed once again the age lines around his eyes and figured he was about late thirties —early forties and she was definitely fifty eight and she wondered  how many times does forty go into fifty eight?
He kissed her; stopped with the pats, pulled her wet self closer and kissed the hell out of her.

The climate controlled air upped a notch, bare toes left the puddled surface and steam came from Beth’s lycra swim suit that suddenly felt a size too small.
“Whoa,” Beth said but he didn’t whoa; instead she heard him say I want to make love to you right now, if that’s okay.
Once she said okay, her soon-to-be-lover peeled off tight jeans and stood up, literally, in the smallest underwear she’d ever seen.

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53 thoughts on “7/20/14 WEWRIWA

  1. No subtlety here, lol, this is going to be a very passionate lovemaking session. I adore that he asked her first. Great snippet.

  2. He’s definitely lighting that match now. 😉 ! Nice description. And that last line made me laugh. Love it. The guys underwear are nothing like her fleeing husband’s were, huh? 🙂

  3. You pulled me right into the tantalizing scene. Wonderful inner thoughts. My only complaint… it was too short!! lol Enjoyed the snippet!

  4. And now I will say ‘Whoa’ because whoa. lol. Hot stuff, Charmaine! I love how there’s no second-guessing and no hesitation on his part. He takes what he wants and she’s helpless to do anything but surrender to the sexy, sexy man’s advances. Whoa, indeed. 😀

    • We all know eight sentences are difficult. In this scene I had to cut dialogue for the sake of description. Next week I’ll try to get some words in. I appreciate your comment. Great way to begin a glorious Monday morning.

  5. Hot and steamy! I like how she’s nervous but observant, especially about her outfit feeling small and him wearing tightie whities. 58 is definitely the new 40! I’m looking forward to the next installment.

    Keep smiling,
    Yawatta

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