9/6/15 WEWRIWA

Hi Gang, what a glorious week. Lots of good news but it will keep for a little while

Continuing with my WIP. This is where the twins are kidnapped from the school where they’ve been kept for many years. They texted their Uncle Stuart in Chicago who gave the word to the evil sister Elizabeth that the cops were after her and drove to the isolated school to kidnap their nieces age seventeen.

excerpt:

They tiptoed down the hall to a small room and one of the girls closed the door cramped for two and now there were five adults packed like sardines, everyone smiling.
“Did you come to spring us ’cause we’ve been waiting for a long time.”
Like a comedy act, the girls had their audience silently cracking up.
Stuart held thumbs up, Eleanor held both thumbs up, and Edgar said, “Break out.”
They packed in one duffel bag, if you don’t have much, it doesn’t take long just like Charlie and Jimmy.
“Wait for us by the front door and we’ll say goodbye and thank you for holding us hostage for too many years.”

The twins never looked back, their green eyes popped wide at the shiny black limousine parked in the driveway.

“We will all be quite comfortable getting to the airport,” as she touched their matching tawny auburn hair glowing in the late afternoon sun. Carey whooped with obvious joy and cartwheeled all the way to the sleek long machine and her sister followed with back flips not missing a beat.

Five minutes later they were all seated in the spacious limousine, the girls apparently subdued by the sudden change in status.

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36 thoughts on “9/6/15 WEWRIWA

  1. The emotions come across beautifully, their delight and excitement, but also their worry are clear. Well done. I’m curious to find out more about their acrobatic skills.
    Who are Charlie and Jimmy? And there are a couple of moments where I think you might be missing a word or two
    “They packed in one duffel bag”, what did they pack, and “to the airport,” as she touched their” I think you may be missing “she said”, but that’s probably just me;).
    Congrats on the great review!

  2. I did get a bit lost about Charlie and Jimmy, and I also think you need to add a “she said” or something, but it is a realistic scene. I’ve always liked how your characters are like anybody I might meet or somebody who might be living in my neighborhood. Except that your characters are more interesting because they do book-worthy things 🙂

    • Charlie is from Reconstructing Charlie. She’s the older sister who killed her drunken father and her mother sent her to Chicago to relatives she didn’t know she had. They raised her and along came brother Jimmy who was taken in by aunt and uncle. It’s a terrific series. This is the 4th and last. I’ll remove the Charlie and Jimmy. It doesn’t fit. Thanks. Book worthy? I love that. Thanks, Marcia.

  3. Having read all of the previous books in this series, I had to chuckle over the back-flips… Stuart and Eleanor were a bit younger when Charlie (the older sister) landed on their doorstep, lol. Charming as always.

  4. The twins sure deserve to be “sprung” from there. Charlie’s mom (and Eleanor’s sister) is a real piece of work. Such a range of emotions in this snippet, from their joy–to their being subdued. 🙂 Nicely done, Charmaine! Enjoy the heat. I hear cooler weather is on the way. 🙂

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