There was, years ago, an old saying: Trick or Treat, Smell my Feet; give me something good to eat. On that charming note, we end Halloween Night. Those were the days my friend, we thought they’d never end. Last night, we drove to the city to meet Don’s cousin who qualified for the Marathon. All the way from California, this darling girl flew and we had a great time. Acting days of yore returned to me. I was in my glory carrying on like looney tunes, having a ball.
And now back to Dr.D and the Dad. When last seen, Diane opened the door and let Tony into her life
Excerpt:
Holding up the big graceful pink shell that carried an echo of the ocean, he said, “Where did this conch shell come from, I’ve never seen one this large.”
“My folks liked to canoe all over so every year we went down south to the Keys and there it was half buried in a dune.”
“Your home is so, um, cozy is the word, filled with things you care about,” and then Tony lifted Tiger and draped him around his wide shoulders and my damn cat purred loud enough for me to hear.
His obvious delight in learning about me and my background filled an empty place in my heart.
“Let’s make dinner unless you’d like to go out cause I’m a good short order cook.”
“ I must warn you, I haven’t shopped in days so slim pickings are what’s available in the fridge and you’re welcome to check it out.”
He leaned over peering in, my tabby clinging to his shoulders.
Nice butt, I thought.
“How ‘bout omelets with cheese and um, Diane, you have beautiful tomatoes.”
I covered my boobs, realized his head was still in the fridge while mine was in the gutter.
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Haha, I like that closing. My head would be in the gutter too! 🙂 Happy Halloween!
You rascal! We think alike.
Tomatoes? (Still laughing) well hopefully they … Taste… Good too!
Kim, join the party. We have great tomatoes.
Love the last line!
Always leave ’em laughing, right? Thanks, Ed.
Oh, that’s funny.
I learned from reading scripts years ago never to cut funny. And it works. Thanks, Cara.
Your writing style is very cozy.
Cozy is nice, so home-like.
LOL, how about them tomatoes indeed.
Cracked me up. Et tu?
Ha! Sweet and funny snippet, loved the tomato gag.
Just came to me in a blinding flash. Are we having fun? You bet we are!
Great last line! Sounds like they’ve both found themselves in a (clearing my throat) sheepish situation. Wonderful snippet!
Your love and enthusiasm for your characters really shines through in this snippet. Thanks for sharing!
That’s me. Bubbling away as I write. Read the story. It’s fun and heartwarming. I so appreciate your comment.
Frank,thanks. Lots going on in this story. You’ll enjoy it.
This story has such a delicious, cozy feel to it. Nice tomatoes indeed! We busty girls do tend to be a bit paranoid . . . every time someone mentions a melon. 🙂
Small busted me never had that prob so it was fun to write about big TOMATOES! Thanks, Christina.
Still laughing over the tomatoes line – that was hilarious. I’m so enjoying this story and adding the cat just makes it perfect 🙂 Excellent excerpt! Hugs…
Hey GF, I’m so pleased you’re enjoying this story. Pets warm a book just the way they do when you have them at home. Hope all is well. Big success with your books, dear pal.
Traitor kitty! I like the tomato line too.
Oh those cats. You never know who they’ll get attached to.
BAHAHA! I loved that last line. Ah, great bit of characterization and motive here. Nicely done. And ah yes, those Halloween days of yore. Thanks for the trip down memory lane.
Thanks, Rose. And now we move on. Tune in next week please.
Hah! She better get her mind out of the gutter before he turns around, or she’s going to be embarrassed!
Wait ’til next week. Between your wooden swords and my surprises, we’re cookin’.
Laughing, “Diane, you have beautiful tomatoes.”
I covered my boobs, realized his head was still in the fridge while mine was in the gutter.” I think I adore Diane! Terrific snippet.
She is lovable. Romance is on the way.
Haha! Always nice when a guy checks out your tomatoes. 😉 Sounds like real life is as magical as fiction in your world right now, Charmaine. I love reading your intros, and the excerpts themselves are marvelous too!
Dear Evelyn, you are a peach! I do hope the new boy friend knows your tomatoes are so perfect. Have fun and kiss gramps for me.
lol- I got a kick out the scene. He might like that her mind is in the gutter. 🙂
And so he will. I can’t wait for next week to write another snippet.