WIP: a change of pace

The cell phone call forced Joan to wake. Her daughter, Shari, a Captain in the Army, calls to say, “Hi Mom, where’s Dad? I’ll be home in a few.” Overwhelmed with the sight of her daughter after 2 tours in Iraq, she flings open the door to find a pregnant daughter and a young man in a wheelchair. “This is Chris; we’re married. He was injured in a missile attack on the USS Cole and here we are on temporary leave. Where’s Dad?”

Excerpt: Shari tells all as Joan sets her up in the clean bedroom Shari left long ago. “Mom, I’m so sorry I didn’t get the call about Dad.” Tears flow; they hold each other. Through sniffles, Shari confides she met Chris at a party, foolish she had sex and now she’s pregnant but the good thing is the baby will have a father.” Exhausted, Shari falls asleep to leave a concerned Joan in charge with Chris on the downstairs couch, she cleans up with a muddled mind.

Early in the morning, the cell calls; Shari in tears says, “I need you, mom. Chris began bleeding; we called for an ambulance to take him to the Veteran’s Hospital nearby. Hurry before it’s too late, mom, he doesn’t look good.”

Dr. Rhee removes his mask and cap, a serious look on his face, “I’m sorry to say he’s gone although he struggled, fought the good fight to live but his time just ran out. You may see him and we will make arrangements for Arlington National and call you.”

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Folks, this is just the beginning of this new story. Next week things will brighten, I promise.

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37 thoughts on “WIP: a change of pace

  1. How tragic for her to learn of her father’s passing then to have the father of her child pass soon after.

  2. Well that’s definitely one way to start a new series off; a more cheerful introduction would’ve been nice haha. Looking forward to the next installment!

  3. Wow, that was almost like an entire novel in one snippet! But you’re so right, life can change in an instant, in more than one direction. Can’t wait to see what’s next for these poor characters! Hugs to you, my friend.

  4. Very poignant and emotional. I had a little trouble with the tense which was first person telling instead third person, and of place and time. Were they staying with Mom? If so, Mom didn’t hear an ambulance? Just questions that kept this from being a totally awesome and heartbreaking scene.

  5. I felt so bad for Shari just finding out about her dad, and then to have the father of her child die. Wow. What a lot of emotion.

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