Easter. . .,What a joyous holiday. Don and I have been invited to Tony’s family home but we’ll stay together this year, just the two of us with our feline family. Next year when Amy and Tony are wed and the family is big-huge-we’ll go there. So happy holiday to all.
Last week Charlie aced the private school test and this week she tries out for the high school running team. This will be the last of our wonder girl’s story, book one. I hope you’ve all enjoyed Reconstructing Charlie, one of my early books.
excerpt;”Have a snack before we go over to the high school; I believe George Adams, the principal,will accept your scores and make room for you there. Choices, Charlie, always remember it’s the choices you make in life that determine your future.
High school; my stomach clenched with the thought of a different city, scared shitless I thought so get over yourself, you’ve got a job to do. Already sweat trickled down my pits to wet my nice tee shirt, so glad I’d worn my jacket to hide any stain and cover the slamming of my over-active heart.
Mr.Adams said my scores placed me in junior year and he asked what sport I liked. “I’m fast so I think track is my best bet as heat rose in my cheeks because I’d never been on a team but I knew how to outrun rats in an alley, rats with two feet and four feet.
I figured the blond girl to be the alpha runner,top dog so this was my try out and I ran with the fear of Dad chasing me, ran as I never had before and never heard the the Coach drive up next to me with a bottle of water. I looked back to see the school in the distance behind hills and woods and realized I’d been running for my life all my fifteen years
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That last line turns this from a straightforward running scene into an insight into his personality. Great job!
Thanks, Ed. You see right into the story.
Great motivation, but I hope she is someday able to move beyond the scars of her past.
And she will although she keeps the terrible secret. The next story, Sin of Omission, brings her younger brother Jimmy to Chicago where he becomes part of the Alfred’s clan. One by one the wicked sister Elizabeth, who threw her children away like garbage, loses her beautiful damaged intelligent children to her sister Eleanor and gracious husband Stuart, the well known lawyer.
“and realized I’d been running for my life all my fifteen years”
What a phrase, Charmaine. Her new awareness certainly puts it all into place.
Oh Kim, you touch my heart.
Like the metaphor of running. Nice. Happy Easter.
And a joyous Easter to you, Cara.
Happy Easter! I really liked this snippet and I loved the running realization at the end!! Beautiful!! Hugs and love from my family to yours ❤
Thanks back atcha, Sara
Love this piece. It demonstrates very accurately the harm that is done to children from damaged backgrounds, who often spend the rest of their lives defined by those formative years. Excellent writing.
Thanks, Rachel. I so appreciate your comment.
Wow the last sentence nailed it! Happy Easter! I’ve got Together Again and will be reading this week. 🙂
GF, Read and read well. You’ll love it.
What a powerful last sentence! You’re bopping right along, feeling the tension at the mention of school, surely, then BAM! Nice job. Happy Easter to you!
Beautiful comment, Rose. Best to you.
Powerful insight into Charlie this week. Hope she gets to stop running some day.
A cross country scholarship to Northwestern, a heroine to Evanston kids and she becomes a builder of homes in a small town.
Love it, Charmaine! Strong and emotional, just the thing you do so well. I’ve enjoyed these peeks at Charlie’s life; your characters always read like they could be my neighbors or family members, so realistic. Happy Easter to you and yours, dear friend. 🙂
Marcia
Marcia, you’re the best. We’ve become special pals across the miles. You’ll enjoy Together,Again, the final part of the series where secrets reveal, twin sisters are kidnapped and return to play basketball at Northwestern U. Family love that never stops giving.
Aw, the poor kid! Hopefully she can run for fun now, and not because she’s escaping rats of various kinds.
Christina, this will stay with her always
That last line just brings it all home. Great scene.
I appreciate your comment, Karen.
Powerful excerpt! I love the last line, the way she realizes she’s been running all her life. Well done!
Tina, my friend, Thanks so much.
Running makes such a great symbol, doesn’t it? You can be running towards something… running away from something… or running in circles, going nowhere!
I’ll keep that in mind, Caitlin.
Starting high school is a scary experience in itself, let alone in a new place. Great snippet and happy Easter to you my friend! 🙂 PS, I love the cover!
Publisher knows whats what! Thanks, Neva.
Oh, that last line. What a time she’s had.
Rats everywhere and now at last she’s free with decent people and room to live. Soon she’ll have her brother due to the kindness of their aunt and uncle and year later the twin sisters arrive to make a full house. By then Charlie is married with two children ,in business with brother Jimmy who has three sets of twins. And Aunt and Uncle never dreamed they’d have any children. I love the series! Thanks, my friend.
I think Charlie’s realization will go a long way towards helping her heal. Great story here, Charmaine!
Well thought out Jenna and much appreciated.
What an incredible last line – fabulous. Power.
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Daryl, you are a honey. Thanks so much for everything.
Powerful snippet, Charmaine! The last line is very telling. I like this one too. “I knew how to outrun rats in an alley, rats with two feet and four feet.” That’s a great example of show don’t tell. That one sentence revels a lot about her life.
Some life she’s had until she took the bus to Chicago and begins a new life. This story came to me in a dream. I’m pleased to bring it to life.
She’s driven by her past and now with opportunities. Great snippet. I read the book and it’s great throughout.
Chelle, you were there at the beginning. Thanks for all your encouragement.
I love that last line–have since the first time I read it. Beautiful!
Kudos from our fearless leader! Thank you a bunch, dear Teresa.